This is a small poetry club that started as a poetry email exchange between two friends. Our goal is to read a poem everyday, and this blog is one way to help keep us accountable. There is only one valid rule in poetry club: there are no rules in poetry club. Read any poem, in any order, with any or no interactions. You decide. We only suggest you read poetry!
3 Aug 2020: "Watching the moon..." by Izumi Shikibu
Too much redundancy for a short poem: two mids and completely means no part left out. Cut the word "Completely" and I probably overlook the mid-sky and like the poem better.
I, too, got caught at mid-sky because I assumed this was a full moon...but it doesnʻt actually say full moon at all. I also thought that the position of the moon at midnight is quite a bit higher than mid-sky, ya?? LOVE your edit to leave out "completely"....I think that the symbol of the moon for me is of cyclical nature....seasons and transitions....so we are never really completely FULL or knowing completely at all.
Too much redundancy for a short poem: two mids and completely means no part left out. Cut the word "Completely" and I probably overlook the mid-sky and like the poem better.
ReplyDeleteI, too, got caught at mid-sky because I assumed this was a full moon...but it doesnʻt actually say full moon at all. I also thought that the position of the moon at midnight is quite a bit higher than mid-sky, ya?? LOVE your edit to leave out "completely"....I think that the symbol of the moon for me is of cyclical nature....seasons and transitions....so we are never really completely FULL or knowing completely at all.
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